My thesis statement is "The Bible deny murder, however, there are several situations which abortion is needed, and it should not be outlawed."
Some Christian disagree with abortion by supporting their opinion from the several bible verse. Also, they states that a baby is the human from the time when the mother get pregnant. However, nowadays, unsafe abortion is one of the biggest problems in some countries which ban or restrict abortion. There are several cases that abortion is needed. The three cases which can be discussed is 1) women's rights, 2) financial reasons, and 3) seriously-handicapped children. Of course there are risks of having an abortion, too. It affects health of the mother and damage the feeling of the parents. Therefore, people who plan to have abortion need to consider about it once again, but the safe abortion system should be provided.
I would like to help focus this better. We need to adjust order and emphasis for better balance.
返信削除The original thesis statement is "The Bible deny murder, however, there are several situations which abortion is needed, and it should not be outlawed."
I suggest "While abortion is attacked on the basis of the Bible's prohibition against murder, there several situations in which abortion is needed, and it therefore should not be outlawed."